Sucked Dry ( Short Audio Book)

So, if you can figure out all the things that went wrong in this recording, you'll win a prize. The easy one is I mispronounced "proboscis" consistently. This is a short piece of horror fiction I penned while going through a writing phase. It isn't really scary, but it still has a few things going for it. Anyway, I am trying to get better, but I don't think it has started taking hold just yet. I'd love to know what you'd think, so drop me a line somewhere because, at this point, I deserve a good critiquing.

Dave